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Where We BelongComments Leave a comment - be certain to list title and PAX forum name (if you have one) Back to SMK Main FanFic page Mort - Great job, as always, Tiff! JustBrowsing - I really enjoyed it too! Please write more! Boots - I enjoy your stories and writing. Thank you so much for sharing them. LWolf - Tiff, please keep writing. Your writing is great. Will you please write more stories? Karthy - Part 1 Tiff, this is great, but could you please *finish* it! Susan - Part 1 What an incredible story! Can't wait for the next parts. I love it! Spins2 - Part 1 Oh wow, Tiff! That was so good. I don't know if I can wait until tomorrow for Part 2! Lee'sGal - Part 1 Great story, Tiff! I can't wait until you finish it. The suspense is killing me. candystriperagent - OMGosh! I loved it. Great job, Tiff! AmandaLee - Part 1 Oh please ... please post part II as soon as you can. I'm dying here. npicklegrl - Part 2 Ahh..cliff-hangers again! It's great, though. I just wish it didn't leave me hanging! ElioraJoy - That was awesome, Tiff. I was actually moved to tears (of joy) at their reconciliation in his apartment. Pam - Part 1 I am totally hooked here....I wait patiently for more of your story. It's been awhile since I have read a story to keep me hanging...thanks! Kelley - Part 1 UGH! Completely unfair to torture us by posting this unfinished. Especially since it is so well-written. I love the way you set the scenes. espy - Ooh Tiff ... you are too cruel to keep us hanging for another day ... (* note to self ... do NOT read unfinished fanfic!) P.S. ... I LOVE it! Vikki - It's clear that you put a lot of time and effort into this, especially your dialogues and non-verbals. I think you did a good job with your story flow. lovelee - Part 1 I swore I wasn't gonna read this until it was all posted. I knew I would regret it. I have no will power. smkcrazy - Part 1 I love the premise of the story. I'm going to try to wait until it is finished to read the whole thing ... not sure if I'll make it though! Anyway, can't wait! ScarecrowLover - Part 1 Tiff, now I'll be going crazy til ya finish it. *Note to self never read a ff til its finished* I've told myself that before but do I listen? No. Now how can I concentrate on my fanfic with that on my mind? ptamom - Part 1 I read the first part and loved it! You are very, very talented. For your first long fanfic this is absolutely wonderful. I just cannot believe that you are going to make us wait until Tuesday for the next part. Thanks once again for sharing. Whaki4SMaKi - Part 1 Wow! I'm hooked. Tiff, you really are good at this. Part 2 Great job! However, I think I will move my tissues a little closer to the computer. Part 3 Just finished the story, wow! It was certainly worth the waiting for. Please write more. Melinda - Enjoyed this story very much especially the last part. Part of me never did like the mystery marriage idea. But the other part understood. It was for the safety of the family. But wouldn't it be safer to have Lee in the house rather than all the way across town? needtoknow - Tiff, your story is excellent. You are very talented. I was (im)patiently waiting for the next part. I have a hard time with the patience thing. This is a great story! I loved it, and I agree that it was well worth the wait. I am wondering ... is there going to be a sequel? That would be nice to see them "come clean." Thanks. BedsideBluebell - Loved it! Loved it! Now, I want to know when you are going to start working on the next story where they tell everyone. Are they going to come clean with the marriage or just get publically engaged? Hmmm ... looking forward to your interpretation! Bravo! Awesome story! Looking forward to more from you! Keep up the great work! MyAmanda - Part 1 I knew I shouldn't have started reading it until it was finished. I can't think of anything else. Do we reallly have to wait? I'm not good at waiting! It's like when kids want to know if we're there yet. Is it finished yet? Uh, is it? (grins) Well, gotta go teach a science workshop. I'll try and stay focused. Julie - I just have to say that while I wasn't too thrilled about the part of the story with Amanda being unresponsive to everyone, I love that you had Dotty be the one to bring her out of it. I think it was a great conversation between the two of them, and brought out some pretty good points about Amanda and relationships. I know Dotty is the comic relief, but it's nice when she gets a chance to contribute something serious as well! HeartPendant - Part 1 The suspense is killing me! What happened next? Now I have to wait to read the rest? How am I going to occupy my time? Patience is not one of my virtues, unfortunately! OK ... I guess if I must, I'll wait. (grins) Part 2 You're doing an awesome job! You left us hanging once again ... are you sure you don't write cliff hangers for season finales? I'm beginning to wonder! Now, I can't wait until Thursday...pacing back and forth, wearing out the carpet in my office! tvgirl - Part 1 GREAT story, Tiff! Absolutely loved it! Oh my gosh! I loved how the accident came so unsuspectedly. Don't get me wrong, I don't want Amanda hurt, but it obviously catches the reader's attention when they don't think anything else will go wrong (at least I didn't). I also like the way you described her feelings, and then how she finally can't take it and breaks down. Wonderful writing! Can't wait for the next part, Tiff! Fantastic job, you are a very talented writer! Amy - I have to say, the last chapter was my favorite, I love when they reconcile. I also like how you had both Amanda & Lee take 'ownership' for the blame of what happened. I liked the insights into both Amanda's reasons and Lee's. I also liked how you rounded it all out. I have to admit, the first chapter was a little choppy. I wasn't quite sure what the real problem was, but as the story got to the last chapter, the real issues were explained. Great way to end the story. I really enjoy your work. Thank you for sharing! Vicky - I personally liked the story. As for Amanda having some sought of breakdown, could you blame her? She isn't Superwoman. I tend to think that the situation she was put in was the straw that broke the camel's back, and she had no control over her emotions, because after all she is only human. What we have to remember is that Lee and Amanda worked it out in the end and that's what is important. I know people agree and disagree about things all the time and that's what makes life interesting. So, this was a good story. ptamom - Tiff, you are killing me. It is really good! Guess I need to go read a tagalogue to satisfy my need for more. Great story. Well worth the wait! I love the part where Dotty sets Amanda straight. I remember early on in my marriage my mom sat me down and explained compromise when I would have much preferred to deck my dear husband. That was 22 years ago! I am sure that one day I will be explaining that to my daughters. It was wonderful and now I am hoping along with the tagalogues, we can get more full length stories. Like I have said before, you do have talent. Thank you for sharing! Merel - Your story wasn't "unreadable" as far as I was concerned. I felt it was well-written -- in that it was free of grammar, spelling and punctuation problems -- and that is saying A LOT -- for me that can make or break my enjoyment of a story. Additionally, while you could address the problems in the story by vamping up the plot, you could just as easily adjust the reactions of the characters in the current plot to be more realistic to the events taking place. Seems to me, either type of edit would work. Looking forward to your next story -- although, with 130 emails waiting, it could already be out there. LOL! DolphinRand - I like the way you had Dotty pull Amanda out of feeling sorry for herself. A lot of times someone to close to the situation like Lee and Amanda were can't see the situation clearly. I don't see Lee staying in the car. I think no matter what, he would have been in the team that apprehended Jessup. It was worth the wait! Thank you for a great story. I also saw the songs that inspired this fanfic. You picked a couple of my favorites. Now, when will we get the sequel that has them coming clean about the marriage to family and friends? (grins) You are a very talented writer, and we are lucky to have you as part of our family. Debbie - Part 1 Tiff, this is wonderful! The interactions seem very true to the canon characters and this seems like a very realistic situation to me. You have to know that the tension would mount the longer the mystery marriage continued, and considering Lee and Amanda's personalities, I really can see it going ballistic like this. I haven't had much of a chance to read the stories posting to the challenge yet, but I made the "mistake" of reading the first few paragraphs of this before I moved it to the holding folder. And once I started, I was caught. I had to finish both parts, even though I knew it was going to end up being a cliffhanger. So all I can say is, "Hurry up, Tuesday!" Gail - The suspense is killing me! I love the boys' question about Lee. This was a beautiful story -- and I think you did a wonderful job. Lee is definately Stronger than Superman and Smarter than Batman! I'm glad Lee was the one to say they 'come clean'. It seems to mean more coming from him. In my own 'come clean' story - it was Lee who said go for it. I never understood why they didn't understand, no matter what, they were connected in the eyes of their enemies. They had been nearly from season one. Married or not - everyone knew how much they meant to each other - even before they did. Great job! NotExactly - This story is really gripping. It's well written (as always) with all the added elements that make it come alive in my mind. I can visualize the scenes because of the details you have added beyond the dialogue, and now I feel as though I'm in the middle of the longest commercial in history. I'm impatiently waiting for the commercial to end and the story to continue. Love it, love it, love it! I was perched on the edge of my seat anxiously awaiting the conclusion. You truly capture the personalities of Lee and Amanda, and it's so easy for me to visualize everything. Great job! Love it! If anyone is reading these comments first, you *have* to go and read this story! You'll love it! Bravo! Hooray! This was great and wonderful way to start my Friday! There's only one little problem -- now I want more! Really terrific, Tiff! Chris
- What a suspenseful story. You had me on the edge of my seat throughout
this story. Luckily I'm so far behind in reading that I had the chance
to just search for the missing pieces. As a scenario for a serious
fallout between Lee and Amanda I think you found the perfect argument.
The mystery marriage had to head for confrontation because nobody
can live like that forever and there was no sign that this would end
anytime soon. Amanda's breakdown was believable to me. The longer
the mystery marriage lasted the more she realized what she was missing.
Then the argument with Lee and she probably lost hope for a while
to ever solve this tangle since there was no end in sight. Where I
had some trouble with is the way you handled Lee while Amanda was
recovering, especially her not talking to Lee at all and that he was
kept in the dark about her condition. I think the threat of her being
paralyzed is too big an issue to not let Lee know. I understand that
she wanted to surprise Lee, but poor Lee had to be out of his mind
not knowing. I liked how you worked in the title, especially compared
with Lee. Jude4247 - Part 1 Just wanted to let you know that I read your first installment of your fanfic. OMG, talk about leaving us hanging. Come on Tuesday ... for part two. Gotta see if Amanda is okay. I can't believe she got hit by a car. Knowing me and how busy Tuesday's are for me, I probably will be left hanging even longer until I can get to it! Oh, and the argument ... oh my gosh, I can just imagine how awful Lee is feeling after arguing and then this happening to Amanda ... it always sets the other person up for a major guilt trip. Amanda tearing up talking to the boys and then how she cries when she goes out for her walk, it was getting to me! I could have been bawling right along with her, but I managed to hold the water works at bay. One of the best lines has to be what Amanda says to Lee about there being other things two people can do to spend time with each other that doesn't involve a bed. I was like (mouth hanging open) "Oh, no, she did not just go there!" LOL! I can't wait to see how it continues. Great job! Nectar99 - Thanks for sharing your story. I've re-read the revised edition here, and commend your first story attempt! I'm glad your open to constructive criticism and honest opinions! Part 1 I really enjoyed this section at the movies. I thought the bickering between Phillip and Jamie was very natural! Also, I love the little moments between Lee and Amanda! I like the sarcasm in Philip's statement and the situation with Lee silently gesturing to him! Shows the comfort in their relationship. At home, sounds like motherly Amanda is put to the test. Very good! It's nice to see Lee pick up on little things like Amanda's nonverbals! He's in tune to her feelings, reactions, etc! Love the playful flirtatious side to him! YUM! The plans Amanda made with her mother threw me a little. If I had been Lee, I would have been more than a little miffed. Why is she angry that he wants to spend time alone with her? They're married ... they *need* alone time! I don't see Amanda behaving this way. Lee's her husband! I can hear them bickering like you have during the argument, but getting them to this point didn't work for me. And getting them there convincingly is a very hard feat! You set the angst up wonderfully! Now if the reason for the argument were valid, it would have been that much better! I like the setup from the moment Amanda enters her house! I think this part was a good look at the struggle that Amanda was suffering with. I believe you could have gone here, just not the way you did. This plot lacked true and deep reasoning. Amanda had no reason to act the way she did toward Lee. Based on the story so far, the only emotion at this point that would be acceptable to me is anger! Anger at herself. Lee did nothing wrong in my opinion. He was reacting to her. Even tears of anger. Some people, who aren't freely able to express anger cry as a release, but this didn't feel like that either. Very good descriptives of the accident scene! I could see this very well! So far, this part is the best 'cliff hanger!' I like where you stopped and left the reader hanging. Part 2 Lee seeing Amanda in everything and missing her is a nice set-up to the feelings Lee was experiencing, due to the situation. Throwing his empty glass and smashing it in the fireplace is the kind of reaction that I can see coming from Lee! Very nice! At the hospital, nice interaction between Lee and Dotty! He's trying to help her remain calm. I *loved* Lee thinking about the ring when he met Carrie. The first phone call to Billy didn't sound like them to me. I think more emotion would have been conveyed. Part 3 My thought, exactly! What *is* Amanda trying to prove? She should be angry with herself for the way she's behaved. I'd like a better description for floating in life for the last few years. This is a fourth season story, so I don't see her burying feelings since season two, trying to be strong for her family. I also blame her for the situation she's in, so I can't see her lying to herself by asking where 'they' went wrong. Thank goodness someone snapped her out of it. She needs a good scolding for a great many things! LOL! VERY NICE DIALOGUE between Dotty and Amanda! I like it! I liked the second phone call with Billy. I don't think Billy stuck his foot into their relationship that broke any boundaries. This is behavior that I've seen him exhibit on the show, so this worked for me. He wasn't pushing Lee for answers, and only offered what was obviously already there to begin with for all to see. On the subplot, I see Lee in the *middle* of the apprehension, not staying in the car, especially with the case hitting so close to home. The relationship left in turmoil is a good break for the last part! TAG I don't like Amanda's tone. Especially for the way she's been behaving. I'm mad at Amanda! LOL! I really dislike her pinning this situation on him. I'd be happier to see her take responsibility for it. After everything that's happened, and his patience, I don't know why Amanda is behaving like this. Why does he need to be on his best behavior? They're married! Am I missing something here? He wants quality time alone with her. She should be happy. YEA! Come clean! BEST SOLUTION YET! This is very good! I agree with Lee's confession very much! How he wants to be Amanda's husband in every sense of the word. YUM! DOUBLE YUM! Their reunion kiss was very touching. I REALLY ENJOYED IT! YUM! Lee's statement about doing everything he could to keep Amanda with him was very nice! VERY NICE, INDEED! The romance between them is wonderful! I always enjoy that! In my opinion, most of the story hinged on the argument. That's why I had a hard time with it. The romance and the playful banter was wonderful. I like the way you portrayed Jamie and Philip and the interaction with Amanda. She sounded like a typical Mother. Amanda and her Mother also had some nice conversations! Thanks for the story, TIFF! GW
- Overall, I think this story had more detail than it needed. I realize
this is a stylistic thing, however, when you are going for suspense,
I think less is more. Part 1 Very
nice opening with action. I generally find a story that can start
with dialogue grabs a reader faster. Nice job of setting up the tension
in that scene back at the house. I think I would consider ending the
paragraph at "something stopped him." To me, the rest of
it is passive voice (showing, not telling). Let the interaction b/t
Lee and Amanda tell us something is wrong. My heart broke for Lee
here. I really think he got the bum end of the mystery marriage and
Amanda was not able to face certain things by keeping her life separate.
I realize it's necessary for the tension, but I didn't like Amanda's
insensitivty about her plans with her mother. I would have liked a
bit more information on this, because this helps me as a reader understand
why she made plans without consulting him. With the argument, I would
like to know if they even tried to work out this problem? Did they
discuss coming clean? Or had the issue been tabled since The Man
Who Died smkukfan - Part 1 Well Tiff, I'm one of those people who believes you shouldn't read a story until it's finish (in case it never is). I read part 1. How could I not? Loved it! Liked the family banter and the musical seats. Funny! So you caught that Philip worshipped the ground beneath Lee's feet too, huh? I love how you’ve caught Philip’s teenage cockiness mixed with his respect and love for his mom. At dinner the next night, I like how the argument gradually builds, it seems very realistic as each seeks another piece of ammunition to use against the other, out of their control, knowing they’re hurting each other and not able to stop either. The fact that Amanda can't leave because Lee drove -- great break in the tension, while keeping their anger in place. I can really see Amanda's inner struggle in my head, think it really works well – although I don’t LIKE it, it’s painful and uncomfortable, which is great, if you know what I mean. Arguments – making the irrational, rational - very real. The way she does everything to not break down in front of her boys. She is so protective. Her breakdown comes across as true-to-life, too. So real. Her realization that she'd been in denial about the secret marriage is very moving. They would get through this. She was sure of it. Ah, strong Amanda, positive Amanda, the Amanda we all love ... not that we don’t love the other ones too! Tiff! How could you stop where you did? Part 2 -- Loved it, Tiff! Glad I don't read unfinished fanfic though - I'd be desperate by now! LOL! Like the use of these familiar characteristics. This is working for me. I’m sharing in the pain (ouch). Good catch, Lee, on the last name and your relation to Amanda. Liked the bit with Carrie's wedding ring -- well, not liked exactly. I love Philip’s behavior with Lee – I see it the same way. Love how top agent Stetson crumbles under Dotty's ‘interrogation’! I’ve always thought she was smarter than she makes out. See, I didn’t buy Lee leaving in Mission of Gold, but I do here. It’s all to do with the phrasing/context, I guess. I love Billy and I think you’ve got him right – a combination of care and concern and amusement. Demonstrates how much he loves his favorite team! Ouch! Amanda's indifference towards him. But, you tell her, Lee! This Amanda is difficult to get a handle on. We know there’s something up but don’t know what yet, great for anticipation, but tricky to have to just standby and watch. Which I mean as a good thing! Anything he did now would only make things worse. With the way things were between them, he was probably the last person she needed to see. Like I said before, a much more plausible reason to get him out of the way than in MoG, probably because they just did NOT explain it, and they should have. Somebody get me the tissues! To be continued...Rats! PART 3 I loved all three parts – I knew I would – but I’ll try and add some constructive (or at least, nice!) comments. I hate the part about Amanda's reactions to everyone, including Lee (in a good way!). I partly want to slap her and tell her to pull herself together and partly want to hug her and take her pain away. I don’t feel this way about everything I read by the way! (grins) Hehe -- gotta love mothers, especially Dotty. She is so smart – that’s why I think she knows more than she let on! Go for it Dotty! "Amanda, your foot moved!" Can I just say, phew! ((wipes brow with arm)) I’m having An Affair to Remember flash! (as always, NOT a complaint!). Moving on to Lee and Billy. Maybe it’s clear to everyone, I’m not sure, but I think Billy is someone Lee can talk to, at least about Amanda -- especially as he kind of knows. I LOVE their entire conversation! Love that Lee respects Billy enough to listen to his opinion, especially seeing as how he’s right! Oh, how the great Scarecrow has grown in the few years we’ve known him! Back to Amanda. Way-hay! She’s on her feet! "...how about you give me what's hiding behind your back there?" Now THAT’S the Amanda we all know and love. Awwww on the gift, by the way. TAG Love the way you’re linking this into the REAL show -- your tagalogues are the real show to me now, I can’t differentiate. "We're chicken." Now *that* I like – I can certainly see that they’d both want to keep it secret out of fear of what can go wrong. It’s tissue time! Wow to the emotions I’m feeling about your little story, and our favorite couple -- not just here, though. Aww to Lee's comments about missing Amanda. Hysterically funny and warm, and loving and just so cool. The whole range of genuine SMK emotions. Love it. The phone ringing next to their ears startled them both and interrupted him. In *true* SMK fashion! Glad to see Lee get rid of Billy so fast. Back to Lee and Amanda. It’s getting warm in here…Now I love this next bit about the second present…"It's from Penelope." I read that line and knew EXACTLY what was going to be in the package! I LOVE that I knew and was right! It’s a wonderful blending of our knowledge of the show and greater depth of meaning behind the superficiality of ‘just another tv show’ -- which of course, this isn’t. Am I taking this WAY too seriously? I just think if you’ve gone to all this trouble, I should appreciate it properly. (winks) I think she would have kept in touch with Penny, too. Love it! Amanda …placed her hands on his chest and spread the fabric of his shirt to touch his smooth skin. MUCH more evocative than pages of gratuitous sex, in my opinion. Phew! I’ve seen the "I love you, Mrs. Stetson/Mr. Stetson" lines used in quite a few fanfiction. I think it’s totally right. She was ‘Mrs. King’ for so long and to first season Lee even the thought of a ‘Mrs. Stetson’ would be so horrifying that it’s his way of acknowledging that he’s changed and glad he has. Also has the implications of home/family/security, I think. Their love had better last – otherwise what are the likes of us going to aspire to? Hehe! Thanks Tiff, for this story. It is truly wonderful (albeit unsettling in places, which is good). Also, thanks for listening to my incessant rambling. I hope you get something out of it and don’t think I’m rambling to hear myself ramble (that’s just an added bonus). Happy writing! MusicBox - Part 1 A little suspense never hurt anyone? You think so, huh? Well, I'll have my psych bills sent directly to you! (grins) I love the first part, Tiff. But, of course, you knew that already. Can't wait for the rest. OH! That's right. I HAVE TO! Todd downloaded my mail for me because he was online all night and told me you had "some FF thing with that title you were telling me about." LOL! I about shoved him out of the chair! Then he says, "I suppose I'm going to bed alone now." I read it last night but it was too late to comment. So I read it again this morning! Love it. But TUESDAY? Tiff! Geez, when I said I liked suspense and people posting parts at a time I meant DAILY not 48 hours apart! LOL! Hmm ... Lee and Amanda in the back seat. Now THERE'S an idea! I like how it worked out. I love Lee and Philip's interaction and how comfortable he and Philip are with their relationship. I can sure see a lot of Lee in Philip and how easy their relationship would be. Poor Amanda! LOL! Oh, and the remarks from Philip sound like our family at the movies! That woman has resolve like no one I've met! LOL! But I can relate. You've really done an awesome job with how hard it would be to continue the *mystery marriage* and the strain it would create on every part of their lives. I can't even imagine. Hmmm ... now we're having *married couple* fights. I like that! Wow, Lee and Amanda are sounding *normal*! This is great. Well, not 'great' that they're fighting but you know ... I think you've pegged exactly what would have happened had we seen further into their future (and had the writers paid any attention to L&A and what their past and personalities were!). You've got them down really good, Tiff! "Well, are you going or not?" Ouch! Then, the silent drive back to the house and their respective departures ... once again, you've got their actions pegged. I love this, Tiff! As if I wouldn't! LOL! Wow! Amanda's near breakdown in front of the boys. Umm, boys? Now's NOT a good time to ask her what she thinks about Lee! Then, the accident. Hmmm ... what was it they were working on? All this and a plot, too? (sniff) Of course her last thought would be of Lee ... very intense, Tiff ... very 'cliffhangery'. Part 2 LOVE the keys in the ignition! The little details here are great. And we all know that 'Vette *dings* way too often! LOL! (sniff) You're breakin my heart with Lee's expression of hurt and pain. I want to comment about the last line before Lee falls asleep, but I'm at a loss. I love this but I'm not sure why. LOL! I just really like how each of them always has the other on thier mind. Even when they're fighting. And I'll always love their connection. The whole note thing, too. Lee and Philip would have been closer than Philip and Joe. Leave it to him to leave Lee a note -- and *inside* the house. Great, Tiff! Argh! Doesn't it just kill you that Lee can't come right out and say that Amanda's his wife? AH! Stupid, pointless, no-good, bad excuse for a plan, mystery marriage ... Geez--oh--Pete's! LOL! Give Dotty the satisfaction of knowing she has a son-in-law she already loves like one! Gotta love Dotty and how even though Joe is there, she still needs Lee. Of course, doesn't everyone? LOL! There it is again, when Lee sees Carrie's wedding ring. Makes my heart break for Lee and Amanda. Maybe it's better that we didn't have to watch this go on onscreen . . . NAH! Great Lee-visuals. Sad, though. Rut-roh. I had a bad feeling right here with the doctor's report to the family ...I like the comfortable relationship with Philip & Lee, though. Wonder if it gets to Joe at all. Hopefully he is just happy that they get along so well. I love the exchange between Dotty & Lee. He needed to hear that. Ohh! Loving it! Well, not loving that they're fighting and she's hurt, but I do love the way you're handling it. You've got these characters down pat! Sounds so gosh darn familiar ..."...you'd better keep me up to date on the latest developments. I want this guy, Billy." Yup, that's our Lee ...LOL! Billy and Lee's conversation sounds like a father talking to a child. Too funny. *But DAD!* Back at the hospital. Uh huh, I had a feeling this would happen with Amanda and her accident. But it's not gonna be as easy to reconcile, is it, Lee? LOL! I like the first sentence there about Lee seeing Amanda sleeping and wanting to smooth back her hair. Watching her do it must have only added to his frustration. Poor guy. OUCH! Amanda's treatment of Lee when he comes to see her! Then, the conversation and his words with Dotty outside Amanda's room. Wow. Wow. Did I say wow? I can't wait to read the end of this! The emotion in the last paragraphs is awesome. Part 3 And you thought I wouldn't need a tissue, Tiff! LOL! BINGO! I really think you hit it right on the head with Amanda. If we had been blessed with a season 5 I'm positive we would have seen a lot of stress before they revealed the marraige. A person can only be strong for so long before the crack. And especially under the pressure she was under. Awesome job with Amanda's feelings, Tiff! Rut roh! Look out, Dotty's on the war path! I was hoping it wouldn't take her long! LOL! "You know what your problem is, Missy? You're scared!" ROTFL! Bingo! Through the entire series, and most fanfics, we see Lee and his problems with relationships, his hang-ups, and his walls. I really like that you brought Amanda's into this. 'Cause you know it's never just one person! Yup, that's Dotty! LOVE it, Tiff! Back to Lee. I like the contrast between Amanda, who is so nice to everyone, including the guards, to Lee who can be so rude without even trying is great. LOVE the conversation between Lee and Billy again at the Agency. Billy didn't get to be Section Chief by being blind! (grins) Wow. I LOVE this. The revelation to Billy, even if he has known longer than they have, about his feelings for and relationship with Amanda is great ... perfect ... I can HEAR Lee saying these things, and Billy, too. This is almost exactly how I would picture season 5 happening. As for the apprehension in the case, you give Lee a LOT more self-control than we've seen previously! LOL! Another sign that he's maturing and growing with Amanda's help. Oooh, Lee's going to get creative with something for Amanda. Can't wait to see what he gets for her! Hmm ... this is vaguely familiar ... walking toward her ... package in hand ... Sorry! I couldn't resist! YAY! Amanda's on her feet. Love it! Ahh! How could I NOT love this part? (sigh) Perfect. Lee is quite the romantic! Something I can most definitely see him doing for her. Wonderful choice of gifts if I do say so myself! LOL! (I'm in a fanfic!) I really love this! Have I said that before? LOL! TAG It turned out so great! I love the end. I love how they reconciled. I just love it! LOL! (Was there any doubt?) "So, have I done a good job in behaving myself so far?" "Not bad." LOL! I just love this little *joke* between them. Love how Lee wants to come clean. Hello! We've been telling you guys that you don't need to hide for years! Whoa ... déja vu! I like how you brought back their first *wedding talk*. "Come here," he implored softly. Ok, just the mental image here is enough to send me to the icebox! I can just hear him ... (sigh) You've definitely got the emotion here. You're so intune with them. Did you have to interrupt all that great emotion, though? Geez, you just couldn't let them be? Guess it wouldn't be Lee & Amanda if they weren't interrupted. Cute phone conversation, though. Then, the second gift. Ahh! I still love it when you bring back little stuff like this -- Penny and the sexy nightgown and honeysuckle and moonlight! How totally appropriate! I love it, Tiff. LOL! I like how Amanda came to the final decision on Lee being like both Superman and Batman. (sigh) The final endearments after Lee carried her to their room -- again with the Kleenex here! LOL! What a great story, Tiff. I'm so glad you used this one for the title challenge! You did a great job of weaving the title into the story in a believable way and making it very sweet. I can't wait to see how they tell everyone. Hurry up with that sequel! Back to SMK Fan Fiction |
